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We the Nocturnal by ~reject4lyf:iconreject4lyf:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Experimental > Other


We the Nocurnal,
the owl and me
creatures of night,
just let us be
by the light of the moon,
and the light of the stars
we find our serenity,
not behind bars,
we are meant to be free,
not caged behind glass
Or locked in a classroom
unable to pass
So we the Nocturnal,
the owl and me
the creatures of night
wish you'd just let us be

                                                           T.Savage 4/9/08
©2008 ~reject4lyf
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~PheonixKarr:iconPheonixKarr: Jun 15, 2008, 12:57:51 PM
Very good rhythm! Good imagery as well :D The only thing I would change is to make the last line something like "will you just leave us be" or something - the word "you'd" throws off the eye and the rhythm a little bit :)
~reject4lyf:iconreject4lyf: Jun 15, 2008, 1:15:14 PM
alright...so, think you can figure out a pic for it?

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~PheonixKarr:iconPheonixKarr: Jun 15, 2008, 2:07:23 PM
I do have a image in mind - Ill be sure to note you if I draw it out :D
~PheonixKarr:iconPheonixKarr: Jun 15, 2008, 5:35:13 PM
K, heres the image in my head: [link]
~reject4lyf:iconreject4lyf: Jun 15, 2008, 5:35:18 PM
thanks!

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home is where my heart lies...about what's right and wrong
home is where my heart lies....about where I belong
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